Ep3. Time skips aren't clear. We start with +5 years previous episode. And here again +5 years? Confusing, I thought first there was a kind of flashback. Would be better to do +4 years, then +6 years. During this time, no clue about what became the FL. About SML, he looks like a tourist, and I don't see him becoming the CEO.
Ep3. Start with an excellent scene. (ML + CEO) Followed by the speech of CEO. The writer make repeat last words by the ML, so we understand the CEO doesn't improvise a new speech (we had a doubt), but it's the ML's one. I'm not used to it since some time now, but here the drama propose something good.
Follow a "plan speak" scene with ML + SML Better than the one in Ep2, as we get an INSERT of the guy they are talking about. We understand better. Still, when they speak about director Chae, the director could do a shot on him when he walks in the place. Tsss.
This one isn’t as random as the bus scene. They’re in the campus so there’s a high chance the FL can find…
SFL was supposed to be at home after she took the bus. So after that, she goes out? And randomly walk at night? And why SML would look at the campus, unless his sister is studying here. Both of them coming at the exact same moment. At this exact place (a campus is big).
Ep2. I can see the threads. Somehow the drama is also boring. Mother situation (scene looks like a Strong woman nam-soon one). Steals money to a gang. Loud plot contrivance. Funny gang come for the FL at school. (what an idea) Just to play it dramatic without much reason for the SML to come, hug and kiss. It quite badly done. Then give a reason for the FL to flee and go live with him. Then ML sad because of forced love story. FL is a creep. I see no reason why someone would fall in love with her.
Ep2, 23:10. On the beach. Here a bad scene. ML and SML speaking. (by the way, I don't see how SML could become a CEO when we never got the idea he's at least a bit good at business and working on that). They talk about a plan, give tons of names we can't remember who's who. In short they talk about other people not in the room, and we understand nothing.
Ep2, 18:05, in the bus. ML takes the bus and randomly, FL is already on the bus. 😖 It reminds me the old dramas where people cross path dozen of time per day in an elevator "by chance". See Cunning Single Lady. 😂 But it doesn't work in a serious drama. 😑
Follow a dialogue where people don't want to speak to each other, as usual. Painful and depressive mood.
Ep2: 16:47, in the stairs. FL is really not pretty. hug. Here she have a yellow ear. it looks like a prosthesis, like an alien who's glued on a fake ear, scary. I can't believe the guys fall for her, she's so dull!!
Then, ML have dozen of side jobs. Does it make sens? He's supposed to be on a very serious business plan!! He already win money with courses, and at least his friend could help for the sake of their project. Damnit. It doesn't make sens. I'd prefer to see him working on business. How he's supposed to be business expert if he spends his time in course or on side works?!! It's like the writer insists on making something I can't believe.
Ep2: what??! Among all hotel-restos, FL work in the one SML and sister have a private dinner. AND she precisely serves here? Unless there is an explanation, it's a too big coincidence.
Ep2: I notice a pattern, ML and FL are systematically vexing, answering NO to absolutely everything, even to each other (scene on the roof). At the start it adds a bit of conflict, but on the long run, it makes the mood heavy and painful, scenes looking the same.
FL asking for ambitious partnership feels prematurate because we don't have the idea they know each other a lot. I find weird the idea that the ML can do a "super-report" on the company, as if it's something no one could imagine before. And we don't have the idea he knows a lot about business before.
Yeah. Comment section is funny, but scary when you are about to start. 😅 I found only negative comments except…
I watched ep1. For now, it's ok. 😅 Not rushed, even some slow scenes. A bit unclear about a plot point. We are supposed to connect the dots, but I couldn't find the clues for that.
The FL isn't pretty enough. I don't find her attractive, quite depressive, cringe. People say she can only make big eyes but I wonder how because she already have big eyes and there isn't much room for enlargement unless to be exorbited.
Omg reading all these comments makes me scared to watch it because I dont want to waste my time watching something…
Yeah. Comment section is funny, but scary when you are about to start. 😅 I found only negative comments except few ones. Two categories. - Some make me want to drop: erratic transitions, too much dialogue, and other technical issues well explained by some people here. - Some make me want to watch: annoying FL, grey characters, toxicity, irrational behavior, painful love triangle, cinderella trope.
I saw annoying, frustrating, terrible, but I didn't find even once the word "boring". No one said it's a boring drama, comments or reviews. So, maybe I'll try first episode?
The drama failed to follow the 'show, don't tell' rule. I don't know if it has something to do with the number…
If you watch older dramas like "temptation of wife", there are often short info-dump by dialogue. But the reason are obvious: - lack of time: k-screenwriters are often in a hurry, and I don't think they can polish their script as long as they should. They need to be good almost on first draft, what is crazy difficult for a whole drama. - lack of budget: reason why the excellent writer of "temptation of wife" use many "tell don't show" is because there is a limited number of set, and no budget to shoot flashbacks, side-scenes, or anything needing money to make it visual. For the writer of this drama, let's add this one: - lack of experience: the writer here just wrote 3 movies and it's her first drama. That's a big change, because a drama is basically a movie, but of 16h screentime.
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The FL is annoying, but not in the good way. 🙁
(why I bother watching that 😅)
I missed the text on smartphone. So only FL is randomly here.
We start with +5 years previous episode.
And here again +5 years? Confusing, I thought first there was a kind of flashback.
Would be better to do +4 years, then +6 years.
During this time, no clue about what became the FL.
About SML, he looks like a tourist, and I don't see him becoming the CEO.
Followed by the speech of CEO.
The writer make repeat last words by the ML, so we understand the CEO doesn't improvise a new speech (we had a doubt), but it's the ML's one.
I'm not used to it since some time now, but here the drama propose something good.
Follow a "plan speak" scene with ML + SML
Better than the one in Ep2, as we get an INSERT of the guy they are talking about.
We understand better. Still, when they speak about director Chae, the director could do a shot on him when he walks in the place. Tsss.
Mother situation (scene looks like a Strong woman nam-soon one).
Steals money to a gang. Loud plot contrivance.
Funny gang come for the FL at school. (what an idea)
Just to play it dramatic without much reason for the SML to come, hug and kiss.
It quite badly done. Then give a reason for the FL to flee and go live with him.
Then ML sad because of forced love story.
FL is a creep. I see no reason why someone would fall in love with her.
SFL has runaway, rich and spoiled girl.
ML is with SFL when RANDOMLY... FL comes. 🙄
Then RANDOMLY, SML comes. 🙃
Here a bad scene. ML and SML speaking. (by the way, I don't see how SML could become a CEO when we never got the idea he's at least a bit good at business and working on that).
They talk about a plan, give tons of names we can't remember who's who. In short they talk about other people not in the room, and we understand nothing.
ML takes the bus and randomly, FL is already on the bus. 😖
It reminds me the old dramas where people cross path dozen of time per day in an elevator "by chance". See Cunning Single Lady. 😂 But it doesn't work in a serious drama. 😑
Follow a dialogue where people don't want to speak to each other, as usual.
Painful and depressive mood.
FL is really not pretty. hug. Here she have a yellow ear. it looks like a prosthesis, like an alien who's glued on a fake ear, scary. I can't believe the guys fall for her, she's so dull!!
Then, ML have dozen of side jobs. Does it make sens? He's supposed to be on a very serious business plan!! He already win money with courses, and at least his friend could help for the sake of their project. Damnit. It doesn't make sens.
I'd prefer to see him working on business. How he's supposed to be business expert if he spends his time in course or on side works?!! It's like the writer insists on making something I can't believe.
Among all hotel-restos, FL work in the one SML and sister have a private dinner.
AND she precisely serves here? Unless there is an explanation, it's a too big coincidence.
FL asking for ambitious partnership feels prematurate because we don't have the idea they know each other a lot. I find weird the idea that the ML can do a "super-report" on the company, as if it's something no one could imagine before. And we don't have the idea he knows a lot about business before.
Not rushed, even some slow scenes. A bit unclear about a plot point. We are supposed to connect the dots, but I couldn't find the clues for that.
The FL isn't pretty enough. I don't find her attractive, quite depressive, cringe. People say she can only make big eyes but I wonder how because she already have big eyes and there isn't much room for enlargement unless to be exorbited.
I found only negative comments except few ones. Two categories.
- Some make me want to drop: erratic transitions, too much dialogue, and other technical issues well explained by some people here.
- Some make me want to watch: annoying FL, grey characters, toxicity, irrational behavior, painful love triangle, cinderella trope.
I saw annoying, frustrating, terrible, but I didn't find even once the word "boring".
No one said it's a boring drama, comments or reviews.
So, maybe I'll try first episode?
EDIT: finaly I watched first episodes. haha.
I was reading comments for checking the mood.
So, I don't think I'll watch it now. 😅
- lack of time: k-screenwriters are often in a hurry, and I don't think they can polish their script as long as they should. They need to be good almost on first draft, what is crazy difficult for a whole drama.
- lack of budget: reason why the excellent writer of "temptation of wife" use many "tell don't show" is because there is a limited number of set, and no budget to shoot flashbacks, side-scenes, or anything needing money to make it visual.
For the writer of this drama, let's add this one:
- lack of experience: the writer here just wrote 3 movies and it's her first drama. That's a big change, because a drama is basically a movie, but of 16h screentime.
Shorter version about the point you're speaking about here:
https://www.stage32.com/lounge/screenwriting/Rules-for-screenwriting-David-Mament-has-some-for-you
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