Instead of doing boring episodes, here a plot-idea.
Cut a lot of the trash then do that some episodes before: - The villain kills Do Hee (just do it in a better way without all plot-holes). - Gu Won sacrifice himself to save her, break book rules and vanishes. - Then, hobo-god goes to see Do Hee and says she's ok to resurect him because blah-blah the proof he doesn't have anymore any selfishness and now is good, etc. - So she proposes to make him an angel. ONLY, there will be consequences. "What ones?" Ask Do Hee. Of course hobo is such a sucker that she doesn't answer. But "balance have to be preserved", kind of evasive bullshit. - And of course, hobo make the villain a demon!!! - Then maybe, I don't know, kills Do Hee again, lololol!!!
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Episode 1, I like: - The scolding scene. Gosh, she take a good shitload on the face! - Surgery scene. It was gripping, the tension was palpable. - The truck scene, from differents angles. I dislike: - The psychologist scene. Because I always dislike psy-scenes, except when the psy is a psychopath villain.
Done with 2 eps and I analyzed the 1st ep which I found SOLID for a start. It had the internal conflicts which…
AAAh!!! I'm rewatching a bit. I had clearly an attention hole in the middle of episode. I missed the tatoo on the woman in red going to meet the ML. And we see later this tatoo in the surgery room. We also see him prepare the surgery room with the patient. I don't remember what I was doing, but I feel like I was absent in these moments. dammit dammit.
I'd be interested to read your analyse because I was confused by episode 1.Maybe I missed some steps, but I feel…
I can have only one work at a time. Well, I made breaks, wrote 1 episode of a maybe drama (the one in western screenplay) and 4 episodes of a drama I'll never continue (it wasn't the goal) and main one is W season 2.
I'd prefered to do something 100% original than a sequel of an existing drama, but the bad luck is I had a crisis of ideas, several months. And with thousand of notes on bloc-note, well... You know, it's like fate's coming for a kill. I didn't have much choice but make a story with this.
Now, I'm in rewriting phase (first draft is never the good one) episode 40. It's about 32h kdrama, with 40 minutes episodes. So it takes time to do. I'd probably need to edit again first part, as I make progress along the way.
Just go on my blog, you can read the beginning of episode 1 for fun. Even if you don't want to read the whole thing, it gives you a view. Here format is very visual. Later Ep14+, I can't use so many pictures (too much time consuming), so it's more close to real screenplay format.
I'd be interested to read your analyse because I was confused by episode 1.Maybe I missed some steps, but I feel…
There isn't much to know. Screenplay is just present tense and concise. There are tons of tips on internet about screenwriting, and many are valid in a korean context. (but there are still differences)
As I don't aim to be produced (99.9% impossible), I put the screenplay later in a visual format, even more easy and nice to read. You can find that on my blog (see my profile).
I wrote a page showing visual screenplay to help readers about visual conventions used, but it can also be used as a guide for writing korean format screenplay. Here: https://w4worlds.fr/html/W_Saison2_Script00_US.html
I'd be interested to read your analyse because I was confused by episode 1.Maybe I missed some steps, but I feel…
I do korean screenplay (in french then translate in english), because the format is amazing. It's more easy to read than novels or western screenplay.
For a long time I tried to find if someone else (outside Korea) was also doing that on the internet, but found no one. So, I'm a bit a recluse.
During a time I was on screenwriting forums, giving feedback for western screenplay, but getting very few. Even when I did an episode with western format because people wouldn't accept another format (that I need to now translate in korean format).
I'd be interested to read your analyse because I was confused by episode 1.Maybe I missed some steps, but I feel…
Thank you very much to take so much time writing this.
I get your points. I'm not sold about the transition accident-surgery, but to be fair, I watched that at the wrong time of the day, tired. It can also be a good hook, because we wonder if she could loose her life on the table. It's maybe a mix of that with other little things that confused me, or just I was too tired to be attentive.
Also, I'm not expert about that, but I was amazed by the directing here.
I think the start is well made, with the flashforwarding of this accident, then flashback in the past. I know flashback aren't liked by western scriptwriters, but as I'm writing kdrama, I don't care about this point. Any flashback is welcome when it has a reason. Speaking of that, as you write too. I'm curious. Do you do screenplay too?
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Cut a lot of the trash then do that some episodes before:
- The villain kills Do Hee (just do it in a better way without all plot-holes).
- Gu Won sacrifice himself to save her, break book rules and vanishes.
- Then, hobo-god goes to see Do Hee and says she's ok to resurect him because blah-blah the proof he doesn't have anymore any selfishness and now is good, etc.
- So she proposes to make him an angel. ONLY, there will be consequences. "What ones?" Ask Do Hee. Of course hobo is such a sucker that she doesn't answer. But "balance have to be preserved", kind of evasive bullshit.
- And of course, hobo make the villain a demon!!!
- Then maybe, I don't know, kills Do Hee again, lololol!!!
Focus on main couple, endless romantic scenes, no need for plot.
No plot hole, rules are respected.
- The scolding scene. Gosh, she take a good shitload on the face!
- Surgery scene. It was gripping, the tension was palpable.
- The truck scene, from differents angles.
I dislike:
- The psychologist scene.
Because I always dislike psy-scenes, except when the psy is a psychopath villain.
I had clearly an attention hole in the middle of episode.
I missed the tatoo on the woman in red going to meet the ML.
And we see later this tatoo in the surgery room.
We also see him prepare the surgery room with the patient.
I don't remember what I was doing, but I feel like I was absent in these moments.
dammit dammit.
I'd prefered to do something 100% original than a sequel of an existing drama, but the bad luck is I had a crisis of ideas, several months. And with thousand of notes on bloc-note, well... You know, it's like fate's coming for a kill. I didn't have much choice but make a story with this.
Now, I'm in rewriting phase (first draft is never the good one) episode 40. It's about 32h kdrama, with 40 minutes episodes. So it takes time to do. I'd probably need to edit again first part, as I make progress along the way.
Just go on my blog, you can read the beginning of episode 1 for fun. Even if you don't want to read the whole thing, it gives you a view. Here format is very visual. Later Ep14+, I can't use so many pictures (too much time consuming), so it's more close to real screenplay format.
There are tons of tips on internet about screenwriting, and many are valid in a korean context. (but there are still differences)
As I don't aim to be produced (99.9% impossible), I put the screenplay later in a visual format, even more easy and nice to read. You can find that on my blog (see my profile).
I wrote a page showing visual screenplay to help readers about visual conventions used, but it can also be used as a guide for writing korean format screenplay. Here:
https://w4worlds.fr/html/W_Saison2_Script00_US.html
For a long time I tried to find if someone else (outside Korea) was also doing that on the internet, but found no one. So, I'm a bit a recluse.
During a time I was on screenwriting forums, giving feedback for western screenplay, but getting very few. Even when I did an episode with western format because people wouldn't accept another format (that I need to now translate in korean format).
Hobo-lifestyle. Poor you! 😥
I was confused and believed first it was you!
I get your points. I'm not sold about the transition accident-surgery, but to be fair, I watched that at the wrong time of the day, tired. It can also be a good hook, because we wonder if she could loose her life on the table. It's maybe a mix of that with other little things that confused me, or just I was too tired to be attentive.
Also, I'm not expert about that, but I was amazed by the directing here.
I think the start is well made, with the flashforwarding of this accident, then flashback in the past.
I know flashback aren't liked by western scriptwriters, but as I'm writing kdrama, I don't care about this point. Any flashback is welcome when it has a reason.
Speaking of that, as you write too. I'm curious. Do you do screenplay too?